Assignment #11 (B)

"THE DAY before the bomb was dropped on Hiroshima, the city, in fear of incendiary raids, had put hundreds of schoolgirls to work helping to tear down houses and clear fire lanes. They were out in the open when the bomb exploded. Few survived. Of those who did, many suffered bad burns and later developed ugly keloids on their faces, arms, and hands. A month after Tanimoto returned from his second trip to the States, he started, as a project of his peace center, a Bible class for about a dozen of them – the Society of Keloid Girls, he called them. He bought three sewing machines and put the girls to work in a dressmaking workshop on the second floor of another of his projects, a warwidows’ home he had founded. He asked the city government for finds for plastic surgery for the Keloid Girls. It turned him down. He then applied to the Atomic Bomb Casualty Commission, which had been set up to study the radiation aftereffects of the bomb—aftereffects that those who made the decision to drop the bomb had utterly failed to foresee. The A.B.C.C. reminded him that it carried on research, not treatment. (The A.B.C.C. was keenly resented for this reason by hibakusha; they said that the Americans regarded them as laboratory guinea pigs or rats.)"（p.141）

Could this paragraph be divided into at least two smaller paragraphs? Leave a comment to address this question and explain your position.

Assignment #11 (A)

"BECAUSE so many people were suddenly feeling sick nearly a month after the atomic bomb was dropped, as unpleasant rumor began to move around, and eventually it made its way to the house in Kabe where Mrs. Nakamura lay bald and ill. It was that the atomic bomb had deposited some sort of poison on Hiroshima which would give off deadly emanations for seven years; nobody could go there all that time. This especially upset Mrs. Nakamura, who remembered that in a moment of confusion on the morning of the explosion she had literally sunk her entire means of livelihood, her Sankoku sewing machine, in the small cement water tank in front of what was left of her house; now no one would be able to go and fish it out. Up to this time, Mrs. Nakamura and her relatives had been quite resigned and passive about the moral issue if the atomic bomb, but this rumor suddenly aroused them to more hatred and resentment of America than they had felt all through the war." (p.72)

Could this paragraph be divided into at least two smaller paragraphs? Leave a comment to address this question and explain your position.

Assignment 10(C) - Help

Consider this passage from Brian’s Hunt:

The Inuit would put a small piece of feather over the hole and stand with bone harpoon ready and when the seal came into the hole the air pushing ahead of its body would ruffle the feather and the hunter would lunge with the harpoon and bury the barded head in the back of the seal.

Why do three different verb forms in this passage occur with “would”? What does the use of “would” convey here?

Original Answer:
In this passage, there are different verb forms because they are used in different characters.

All assistance that contributes to revising this answer is greatly appreciated.

Assignment 10(B)

Consider this passage from Brian’s Hunt:

He thought at first that he had changed again, that there were steps in how he had done so, but he realized that he was changing constantly as the world around home shifted, as he learned more.

In this passage we find Brian’s observations about himself. How do his observations relate to you exactly? In other words, what should you take from this passage?

Original Answer:
From this passage, I knew the knowledge is infinite, as the world shifted, this different kind of knowledge will come to you, we have to learn about them. Learning is good for us. We need to keep learning.

Revision Answer:
From this passage, I knew the knowledge is infinite, as the world shifted, this different kind of knowledge will come to me, and I have to learn about them. Learning is good for us. We need to keep learning. Also, I have changed everyday because the world around me shifted, and I have learned more and more by the world changes and what I saw.

Assignment 10(A)

According to Brian, what is the key to hunting and why is that the key? How might this relate to you even though you are not a hunter?

Original Answer:
The key to hunting is patient. Patient is the key to hunting because hurry will scar the animals away. Patient is the key to teaching. I have a friend who was not good at math. I teach him everyday after class. I do not know why he never understands some work problem, so I taught him in patient until he understand. If I am no patient, I think he will think I do not want to teach him.

Revision Answer:
The key to hunting is patience. You needed to take the time required fo hunting. Without patience, you are not able to get anything. I have a friend who was not good at math, so I was going to teach him everyday after class. I do not understand why he was not understand the questions which I thought are very easy to him; therefore, I taught him in patience until he understand. Patience is important to teaching. If you were teaching unpatience, your student will have presure and cannot understand the questions.

Assignment # 9B

“A prominent local Navy man, a former employee, had committed suicide the day before by throwing himself under a train—a death considered honorable enough to warrant a memorial service, which was to be held at the tin works at ten o’clock that morning.” ( p. 16)

This passage confuses me because I do not understand why and what is that means the employee who committed suicide be “considered honorable enough to warrant a memorial service".

Assignment # 9A

“It was several days before the survivors of Hiroshima knew they had company, because the Japanese radio and newspapers were being extremely cautions on the subject of the strange weapon” (p. 57)

This passage confuses me because I do not really understand what the meaning of “the survivors of Hiroshima knew they had company” is. What company did they have?